Why was the edit rejected?
This edit was rejected by two reviewers for the following reason;
Chenmunka (Reject): This edit defaces the post in order to promote a product or service, or is deliberately destructive.
TheLethalCarrot (Reject): This edit was intended to address the author of the post and makes no sense as an edit. It should have been written as a comment or an answer.
For the record, I would have also rejected the edit if I'd seen it come up in the queue. You didn't just fix minor problems, in your own words you
"Completely rewrote the answer"
which is contrary to the purpose of editing which is to
to fix grammatical or spelling mistakes
to clarify the meaning of a post without changing it
to correct minor mistakes or add addendums / updates as the post ages
to add related resources or hyperlinks
So, what should you have done?
You've got higher value sources and a better translation. You should have written your own answer. Go do that now so I can upvote it.